kai ora rangi its wai your sister i like your holiday recount i had the same holiday but not as boring it really sounds fun your holiday nice work
Kia ora Rangi,Wow! it sounds like you had a bit of fun on the holidays. By the way I just wanted to say you used nothing quite a lot and it kind of takes the hooks away for your story. But on the other hand I would like to say good work and make sure you use more different hooks.Nga MihiYvette WILSON (your friend)
so we had to check someone work it was pretty fun reading there working and marking it .