Kia ora Rangi, Wow! it sounds like you had a bit of fun on the holidays. By the way I just wanted to say you used nothing quite a lot and it kind of takes the hooks away for your story. But on the other hand I would like to say good work and make sure you use more different hooks. Nga Mihi Yvette WILSON (your friend)
kai ora rangi its wai your sister i like your holiday recount i had the same holiday but not as boring it really sounds fun your holiday nice work
ReplyDeleteKia ora Rangi,
ReplyDeleteWow! it sounds like you had a bit of fun on the holidays. By the way I just wanted to say you used nothing quite a lot and it kind of takes the hooks away for your story. But on the other hand I would like to say good work and make sure you use more different hooks.
Nga Mihi
Yvette WILSON (your friend)